my favorite part was how there were several floating objects in the spaceship even while the narration clearly indicates that there is some sort of gravity system in place (running, slamming on floors, slamming into walls, liquids flowing down rather than outwards, etc). the hypothermia bit was also great
I found it alright; knowing it was a april fools game beforehand I could enjoy some of the tropes as parody in the "story" sections- like the inexplicably super-detailed medical knowledge that the writer researched (both with the arrow and hypothermia lol). Some didn't hit as hard (reusing "comically" and "unceremoniously", eh, sure). The meta-story felt a bit unfocused but there are some solid jabs with common artistic feedback experiences.
The best part was for me the deer reveal. I actually turned away from the screen and laughed at how ridiculous it was (10/10). It was a good mix of timing, surprise and setup/reveal.
I think I would've liked it more if more of the jokes where more on that level, but it has it's moments and charm, and it did keep me interested enough to finish it.
Read the date it was released. It was kinda funny, if i would have read the date it was realesed i would have enjoyed it but becasue it didnt i was really confused
Just if anyone else is expecting this to be “serious”. Make sure to check the date it was release.
It will tell you everything, if you find it confusing at first.
Well… like many unexpected readers/players… I feel cheated, yet…
I can’t say that I didn’t enjoy it.
Anyway…
I was about to start reading everything else, but after the break from the main character’s POV, I… I’ll be honest. It made me lose interest on the rest.
Spoilers ahead…
This is a comedy VN that was released on April 1st. That alone should have hinted on what the VN was supposed to be.
As for the story… I was loving the writing at the start and was really expecting it to be an actual serious story. When the mention of Taco Bell appeared, all interest was thrown out of the window. I was expecting a return to “normalcy” but in the end it wasn’t like that… Just when I thought it was returning to normal, they throw another breaking point that made me laugh, honestly. But I was still losing interest, even continued, but the damage was done.
In short: Not what I expected but enjoyed nonetheless. Well-made and if I knew beforehand this was a comedy, perhaps I would have taken more interest than normal, maybe even read more. So far, this is all I can say… Should you read it? Sure, go ahead, I was expecting something else. But, I won’t spoil you the content… besides of the Taco Bell bit being spoken in the VN. Heh, anyway, enough about my rambling. I need to recover from this, and perhaps I will read it all the way the next time I pick it up.
Looking back, I think the intro was a little too long and genuine for it's own good and ended up getting people invested instead of primed for the reveal. To be honest, I did recognize the risk during development but I became interested in the characters myself, and instead of trimming down the first few drafts to serve the purpose of the concept, I ended up keeping a bit too much and playing it a bit too straight. So I apologize if anyone feels betrayed. That wasn't ever my intent.
There is a thread of sincerity I tried to keep throughout the game. If you decide to follow through and play the rest I hope that helps with your viewpoint, but if not, thank you for taking the time to download and give your feedback.
Also, the Taco Bell joke was definitely too ridiculous and immersion breaking, especially at that point in the game when the reader is reorienting themselves from the reveal. It feels like a first draft concept and gets a lot of mixed responses. I seriously considered removing it during development but it acts as a setup to several later jokes which I really like, so ultimately it stayed.
I understand that point of view. Not many developers would release a game intended to be taken seriously on April 1st. And to be honest, not only the writing is good, I enjoyed even well… after expecting something more… “serious”. Nothing wrong with a joke on the day it was released, as of now, I still feel a bit taken a back, but willing to have another reading session to finish it.
Feeling cheated is rather personal. But still understandable since the VN took itself seriously on the start. I didn’t point it out because that was a wrong way to change the perspective to the reader. More like the change was rather too abrupt to let it settle. The changes of perspective and the way it changes really brings something, even if it was intended as a comedy.
What I’m trying to say, is that… Even if it was unexpected, it shows how some authors/writers have trouble writing. (that might not be a point, but it seemed like that.) I myself have done some writing and there are times I feel like joking with other characters. But Immersion was broken rather quickly. I guess that’s what made me stop reading.
Like I said, I took it personally and probably overreacted to it. Other than that, I’m still thinking of trying again, and this time go with an open mind rather than what I was expecting. It might be different from person to person. But I can’t lie that there is potential here, I did laugh, so it did what it was supposed to do.
In short: the fault falls in both of us. As a reader, I expected something that wasn’t intended. And I think, as a writer, there wasn’t anything explicit saying that this was not something to be taken seriously. Because of that missing information, it leads to some readers to feel cheated. I don’t blame you, Boroco. You wanted to create something with your team or alone (I’m not sure). It was an oversight, everyone can make a mistake, and honestly I would say is a mistake that you can learn from.
(I feel like I’m rambling…) I’d say that take this and the criticism of others in a constructive way to become better and learn from it. That is the best course of action that you can take. Maybe my words might fly over, since I notice how much I have been writing. But, I don’t think this should be taken in a way to hurt you, it was an honest opinion. I for sure will give it another try. (And sorry if have been rambling since the beginning.)
dumb you have gold why not mine it do you think its fools gold its not if you do want to make it diff just have the human save the wolf from geting shot by geting shot have the wolf get him pached up with his tools the hunt not going well and him not bring back food made them want kill him the human from tribe or earth sees this and saves him but gets shot the outher wolf did not see if he got him as a diff wolf went to get him it was soon to be dark me could be a vet or doctor or the wolf tells him what to do they could go to cave or to the humans city at the cave they hide in the cave his dad has some food ther for hunting but its under a rock so bugs and outher stuff cant get it they hide ther then the story gos on from ther the city old time city with way less ppl as new keep them safe in it ther are outher kind of furrys the wolfs in his village are seen as not primitive but more like as the druids not as much now but some still see them as a good grop could have them use magic or blessing this is all just my rambling
I enjoyed the story, it was cute and funny... However! I feel cheated out of a story where the main character takes care of the wolf for a change! AHHH!
Wow, I was really into the story until the "my name is Bonnie" thing happened, but that wouldn't be bad (although I was hoping I could write whatever name I wanted, but oh well), but then there was that silly joke scene with Fang and that cut leaving the story as something fictitious, I mean, a fiction within another story. And I don't agree with Hank at all, I understand that he likes the submissive male vs. dominant male fetish more... but I was really liking the dynamic of Fang showing that tender side.
That cut of the story completely took me out of the story. But well, later I will continue to see how it goes.
Edit: What? Taco Bell? Oh... I see, is this a comedy? I didn't see any signs of this anywhere, I feel cheated, I was expecting a romance story D: But I enjoyed several moments, and I can only thank you considering that it is free. But I was expecting something that takes itself seriously.
Starting this story my first reaction to Fang was “You…..kinda smol. A tough lil guy…headpat recipient for sure. Then the twist happened.🤗 Bonnie and Hank are now my frenemies😂 The whole time Hank was giving his “notes ” I was ranting “Don’t you dare nerf our character you sonnavbitch.” This story is amazing.
It strikes me that in the description you speak of the humanoid wolf as "Wolf man" and that the story is about two "adventurers" traveling around. Have you by chance been inspired by a gameplay in the Adventure Mode of Dwarf Fortress? Or maybe I just like it so much that I see it everywhere XD
I do like dwarf fortress but I've only played fortress mode. I'm sure I'll give adventure mode a try when it comes out on the steam version. I was mostly inspired by other VNs :)
I have an idea of a story where a world that was generated in the Dwarf Fortress inspired me, but I don't know whether to just do it as a comic in Furaffinity or try to make a game like this. Was it difficult for you to learn how to make a VN? I mean with the program to mount everything. How time did it take you to make yours?
It took a couple of months with two people but the programmer is experienced and had their own toolset already. I recommend renpy if you are trying to break into VN development.
An innovative masterpiece. Truly, an indomitable force for its genre. The writing was impeccable, the characters original, and the worldbuilding daring and new. A must read for any TRUE consumer of exquisite furry VN content.
Just finished reading this, and while I don't want to say too much about it because of spoilers, I will say I enjoyed it very much. As a friend of your co-creator on this, I just wanted to say I appreciate the work that both of you do.
Thank you! This is my first time taking the reins on something like this. I was a little worried through development that the game wouldn't be well received so your support genuinely means a lot.
Hi there! I came across with your app and I noticed it was released like 6 hours ago. I like to read stuffs and it is a hobby of mine and I am looking forward on reading this one ! If I had the money I would like to donate but sadly I don't but I hope one day I can! 😄 I also noticed that there was no comments so yeah.... 😅
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my favorite part was how there were several floating objects in the spaceship even while the narration clearly indicates that there is some sort of gravity system in place (running, slamming on floors, slamming into walls, liquids flowing down rather than outwards, etc). the hypothermia bit was also great
I found it alright; knowing it was a april fools game beforehand I could enjoy some of the tropes as parody in the "story" sections- like the inexplicably super-detailed medical knowledge that the writer researched (both with the arrow and hypothermia lol). Some didn't hit as hard (reusing "comically" and "unceremoniously", eh, sure). The meta-story felt a bit unfocused but there are some solid jabs with common artistic feedback experiences.
The best part was for me the deer reveal. I actually turned away from the screen and laughed at how ridiculous it was (10/10). It was a good mix of timing, surprise and setup/reveal.
I think I would've liked it more if more of the jokes where more on that level, but it has it's moments and charm, and it did keep me interested enough to finish it.
Read the date it was released. It was kinda funny, if i would have read the date it was realesed i would have enjoyed it but becasue it didnt i was really confused
that was cute, honestly! loved it!
First things first…
Just if anyone else is expecting this to be “serious”. Make sure to check the date it was release.
It will tell you everything, if you find it confusing at first.
Well… like many unexpected readers/players… I feel cheated, yet…
I can’t say that I didn’t enjoy it.
Anyway…
I was about to start reading everything else, but after the break from the main character’s POV, I… I’ll be honest. It made me lose interest on the rest.
Spoilers ahead…
This is a comedy VN that was released on April 1st. That alone should have hinted on what the VN was supposed to be.
As for the story… I was loving the writing at the start and was really expecting it to be an actual serious story. When the mention of Taco Bell appeared, all interest was thrown out of the window. I was expecting a return to “normalcy” but in the end it wasn’t like that… Just when I thought it was returning to normal, they throw another breaking point that made me laugh, honestly. But I was still losing interest, even continued, but the damage was done.
In short: Not what I expected but enjoyed nonetheless. Well-made and if I knew beforehand this was a comedy, perhaps I would have taken more interest than normal, maybe even read more. So far, this is all I can say… Should you read it? Sure, go ahead, I was expecting something else. But, I won’t spoil you the content… besides of the Taco Bell bit being spoken in the VN. Heh, anyway, enough about my rambling. I need to recover from this, and perhaps I will read it all the way the next time I pick it up.
(!) Spoilers incoming (!)
Looking back, I think the intro was a little too long and genuine for it's own good and ended up getting people invested instead of primed for the reveal. To be honest, I did recognize the risk during development but I became interested in the characters myself, and instead of trimming down the first few drafts to serve the purpose of the concept, I ended up keeping a bit too much and playing it a bit too straight. So I apologize if anyone feels betrayed. That wasn't ever my intent.
There is a thread of sincerity I tried to keep throughout the game. If you decide to follow through and play the rest I hope that helps with your viewpoint, but if not, thank you for taking the time to download and give your feedback.
Also, the Taco Bell joke was definitely too ridiculous and immersion breaking, especially at that point in the game when the reader is reorienting themselves from the reveal. It feels like a first draft concept and gets a lot of mixed responses. I seriously considered removing it during development but it acts as a setup to several later jokes which I really like, so ultimately it stayed.
I understand that point of view. Not many developers would release a game intended to be taken seriously on April 1st. And to be honest, not only the writing is good, I enjoyed even well… after expecting something more… “serious”. Nothing wrong with a joke on the day it was released, as of now, I still feel a bit taken a back, but willing to have another reading session to finish it.
Feeling cheated is rather personal. But still understandable since the VN took itself seriously on the start. I didn’t point it out because that was a wrong way to change the perspective to the reader. More like the change was rather too abrupt to let it settle. The changes of perspective and the way it changes really brings something, even if it was intended as a comedy.
What I’m trying to say, is that… Even if it was unexpected, it shows how some authors/writers have trouble writing. (that might not be a point, but it seemed like that.) I myself have done some writing and there are times I feel like joking with other characters. But Immersion was broken rather quickly. I guess that’s what made me stop reading.
Like I said, I took it personally and probably overreacted to it. Other than that, I’m still thinking of trying again, and this time go with an open mind rather than what I was expecting. It might be different from person to person. But I can’t lie that there is potential here, I did laugh, so it did what it was supposed to do.
In short: the fault falls in both of us. As a reader, I expected something that wasn’t intended. And I think, as a writer, there wasn’t anything explicit saying that this was not something to be taken seriously. Because of that missing information, it leads to some readers to feel cheated. I don’t blame you, Boroco. You wanted to create something with your team or alone (I’m not sure). It was an oversight, everyone can make a mistake, and honestly I would say is a mistake that you can learn from.
(I feel like I’m rambling…) I’d say that take this and the criticism of others in a constructive way to become better and learn from it. That is the best course of action that you can take. Maybe my words might fly over, since I notice how much I have been writing. But, I don’t think this should be taken in a way to hurt you, it was an honest opinion. I for sure will give it another try. (And sorry if have been rambling since the beginning.)
dumb you have gold why not mine it do you think its fools gold its not if you do want to make it diff just have the human save the wolf from geting shot by geting shot have the wolf get him pached up with his tools the hunt not going well and him not bring back food made them want kill him the human from tribe or earth sees this and saves him but gets shot the outher wolf did not see if he got him as a diff wolf went to get him it was soon to be dark me could be a vet or doctor or the wolf tells him what to do they could go to cave or to the humans city at the cave they hide in the cave his dad has some food ther for hunting but its under a rock so bugs and outher stuff cant get it they hide ther then the story gos on from ther the city old time city with way less ppl as new keep them safe in it ther are outher kind of furrys the wolfs in his village are seen as not primitive but more like as the druids not as much now but some still see them as a good grop could have them use magic or blessing this is all just my rambling
Are you dislexic or something like that?
Didn't mean to be rude btw
no no your right i am dislexic and sux at spelling
Don't worry, I kinda understood what you said in the comment.
I learn kids to read so a dislexic is nothing that I've never seen before (｡ﾉω＼｡)
Read and write, forgot to say that
I enjoyed the story, it was cute and funny... However! I feel cheated out of a story where the main character takes care of the wolf for a change! AHHH!
All jokes aside thanks for sharing!
Five Stars!
I wasn't expecting that twist. I really liked it.
Cheesy. Gordita. Crunch. This was hilarious! I love it!
First part was ok, but then I thought what the hell is this, sorry not my cup of tee
Wow, I was really into the story until the "my name is Bonnie" thing happened, but that wouldn't be bad (although I was hoping I could write whatever name I wanted, but oh well), but then there was that silly joke scene with Fang and that cut leaving the story as something fictitious, I mean, a fiction within another story.
And I don't agree with Hank at all, I understand that he likes the submissive male vs. dominant male fetish more... but I was really liking the dynamic of Fang showing that tender side.
That cut of the story completely took me out of the story. But well, later I will continue to see how it goes.
Edit:
What? Taco Bell? Oh... I see, is this a comedy? I didn't see any signs of this anywhere, I feel cheated, I was expecting a romance story D:
But I enjoyed several moments, and I can only thank you considering that it is free. But I was expecting something that takes itself seriously.
i was so invested with the description and the story keeps getting worse in a good way. haha such a unique experience tho
The best description of the story.
I would just say it kept getting worse.
This was hilarious, thanks so much for the laughs! Oh Bonnie, you try your best.
Magnificent!
So true...
I liked the topics this story touched upon and it's overall a cute and funny lil game! Loved it >w<
I thought basket weaving was peak comedy but then space baskets arrived
Ok this was fun. I had a great time.
bro this fucked me up like what!!!!
That first appearance of Fang in the cave with the fire was legit terrifying. Would've been better if he was maybe 20% bigger though.
Starting this story my first reaction to Fang was “You…..kinda smol. A tough lil guy…headpat recipient for sure. Then the twist happened.🤗 Bonnie and Hank are now my frenemies😂 The whole time Hank was giving his “notes ” I was ranting “Don’t you dare nerf our character you sonnavbitch.” This story is amazing.
bro gave his million word honest reaction
I swear to all that is unholy, this was amazing. I hated it with a passion but such an amazing twist. 90/10, absolutely recommend it wholeheartedly
Fang is really cute, I wish there was more content with him.
It strikes me that in the description you speak of the humanoid wolf as "Wolf man" and that the story is about two "adventurers" traveling around. Have you by chance been inspired by a gameplay in the Adventure Mode of Dwarf Fortress? Or maybe I just like it so much that I see it everywhere XD
I do like dwarf fortress but I've only played fortress mode. I'm sure I'll give adventure mode a try when it comes out on the steam version. I was mostly inspired by other VNs :)
I have an idea of a story where a world that was generated in the Dwarf Fortress inspired me, but I don't know whether to just do it as a comic in Furaffinity or try to make a game like this. Was it difficult for you to learn how to make a VN? I mean with the program to mount everything. How time did it take you to make yours?
It took a couple of months with two people but the programmer is experienced and had their own toolset already. I recommend renpy if you are trying to break into VN development.
Is this real? The publish date was sus -_-
It is 100% real. One, if not the best, finished furry visual novels on Itchio.
I can't believe I fell for it :sob:
Amazing VN loved every second of it
An innovative masterpiece. Truly, an indomitable force for its genre. The writing was impeccable, the characters original, and the worldbuilding daring and new. A must read for any TRUE consumer of exquisite furry VN content.
<3
Is there gonna be a Mac zip for this visual novel?
We uploaded a Mac build now. Let us know if you run into any issues with it. :)
Just finished reading this, and while I don't want to say too much about it because of spoilers, I will say I enjoyed it very much. As a friend of your co-creator on this, I just wanted to say I appreciate the work that both of you do.
Thank you! This is my first time taking the reins on something like this. I was a little worried through development that the game wouldn't be well received so your support genuinely means a lot.
Hi there! I came across with your app and I noticed it was released like 6 hours ago. I like to read stuffs and it is a hobby of mine and I am looking forward on reading this one ! If I had the money I would like to donate but sadly I don't but I hope one day I can! 😄 I also noticed that there was no comments so yeah.... 😅
Not looking for donations but thank you! If you want to support the game you can leave a rating if you enjoyed your time playing.